tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post997288560849699629..comments2023-11-05T20:07:42.934+11:00Comments on The Aspiring Writer: Writing: Internal ThoughtsBonnee Crawfordhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-76454319177187080932020-09-11T13:16:49.630+10:002020-09-11T13:16:49.630+10:00"""Pulicic take jersey No10>>..."""Pulicic take jersey No10>> <a href="https://manufanssss.blogspot.com/2020/09/10-29.html" rel="nofollow">HavertZ choose No29 same number in German squad</a>"""IAHIAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913122731160954675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-50253426502076430242013-03-05T16:04:09.250+11:002013-03-05T16:04:09.250+11:00Thanks so much for your support Christina :D Thanks so much for your support Christina :D Bonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-45648176999163515402013-03-05T12:15:56.944+11:002013-03-05T12:15:56.944+11:00I love this internal monologue you are having. I a...I love this internal monologue you are having. I am always asking myself questions as I go through my stories.Christina Farleyhttp://christinafarley.com/blog/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-34585857917227031502013-03-04T14:15:26.068+11:002013-03-04T14:15:26.068+11:00I doubt I'll be published too soon, but either...I doubt I'll be published too soon, but either way, there's always something that somebody won't know that somebody else will. We can all learn from each other. That's why I posed the question in the first place :) xxBonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-25661027261122409622013-03-04T12:09:04.022+11:002013-03-04T12:09:04.022+11:00Hahahhaha its fine :D This is weird, amateur write...Hahahhaha its fine :D This is weird, amateur writer me giving soon-to-be-published writer you tips! hahaha xxEJ ☯https://www.blogger.com/profile/17405373409350314783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-81324751385979698032013-03-03T22:38:40.598+11:002013-03-03T22:38:40.598+11:00Ah yes, 'Fifty Shades'... my mum has a cop...Ah yes, 'Fifty Shades'... my mum has a copy of it at home, I will borrow it when I get around to it... perhaps. Bonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-23206353834294783512013-03-02T23:45:46.281+11:002013-03-02T23:45:46.281+11:00Just a follow up. I'm still reading FIFTY SHAD...Just a follow up. I'm still reading FIFTY SHADES OF GREY, one of the best selling books ever. It is full with thoughts of the main character on every page, like over five thoughts per page. When you'll be in the University, pick a copy in the library and you'll see.G.M.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02652216131823877445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-56428493484643881982013-03-02T22:42:44.809+11:002013-03-02T22:42:44.809+11:00I hadn't thought of it myself until recently, ...I hadn't thought of it myself until recently, when I saw how much I was changing things I'd described as the narrator into the main character's thoughts. I think varying it is good. I'll keep that in mind. Thanks EJ :) xxBonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-15950971741493154752013-03-02T22:40:52.925+11:002013-03-02T22:40:52.925+11:00What you've told me about the agent's comm...What you've told me about the agent's comments on your book is really encouraging to me in this situation. I hope I can do accommodate for my character's thoughts and feelings appropriately and without overdoing it too much :) <br /><br />Now that I read your suggestion, I think it sounds better than what I have :) Thank you for that. Bonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-81018081066683840332013-03-02T22:39:19.908+11:002013-03-02T22:39:19.908+11:00The purpose of the internal thought for this parti...The purpose of the internal thought for this particular story is to make the reader curious. The thoughts are often along the lines of the example above, without ever telling EXACTLY why until later in the story. So hopefully, I'm not giving too much away... Thank you for the input :) Bonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-60280680870158600802013-03-02T22:37:52.733+11:002013-03-02T22:37:52.733+11:00I've seen it done on amateur websites and I li...I've seen it done on amateur websites and I liked the idea of it, so I've used it a few times in the past. But I couldn't recall ever seeing it in a published book. I'm glad you think it might work, but balance is definitely a good idea. Bonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-42843895573330177392013-03-01T15:52:01.810+11:002013-03-01T15:52:01.810+11:00Wow thats a hard question and my answer is that I ...Wow thats a hard question and my answer is that I like to vary it. Usually I do a little bit of both in my writing but i have never really thought about it to be honest :P<br />xxEJ ☯https://www.blogger.com/profile/17405373409350314783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-79699969969384819522013-03-01T04:59:04.853+11:002013-03-01T04:59:04.853+11:00The rule of Show and Don't Tell isn't easy...The rule of Show and Don't Tell isn't easy to follow, but let me share my experience. An editor for a major book publisher rejected my second book after reading the first chapter with the comments that while the story is original, it was lacking the thoughts and feelings of the main character. Naturally, I already made changes by adding lots of thoughts. I think that publishers are looking for lots of thoughts and feelings, because they want the readers to connect with the main character. I have no idea how much is too much, but probably 1-2 thoughts per page is okay.<br />Not sure why, but it immediately jumped to change your example to :<br />"I can't be your friend, she thought. But pushing you away now would be wrong."<br />G.M.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02652216131823877445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-22158045080964609092013-03-01T02:48:13.279+11:002013-03-01T02:48:13.279+11:00I think that you can do it well, like said before,...I think that you can do it well, like said before, as long as you keep a good balance. You want to create the character obviously, but dont go so deep, that you are serving your characters to the audience on a silver platter.Part of the excitment of reading is discovering who the people in a story really are compared with you own self. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-5754309871840954192013-03-01T00:08:15.018+11:002013-03-01T00:08:15.018+11:00I agree about the balance. I usually write in fir...I agree about the balance. I usually write in first person, present tense, so it lends itself well to internal thoughts, but at the same time, I try not to overdo it. It sounds like a fabulous way to bring that aspect into the third person narration, though! :)Sharihttp://workofheart09.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-38231130362965203492013-02-28T22:45:02.926+11:002013-02-28T22:45:02.926+11:00Well that helps my case a little, so thank you :) ...Well that helps my case a little, so thank you :) Bonnee Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513268628209169538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2372161360756471399.post-82649431639846451442013-02-28T21:55:28.066+11:002013-02-28T21:55:28.066+11:00It's all about balance. I like good internal d...It's all about balance. I like good internal dialogue, and I like good exposition in general, but it has to be good (duh!) and it has to be in the right amount. Trying to find that balance is the tough part.JeffOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07947660745120963286noreply@blogger.com